Comments for Rethinking Journalism http://www.rethinkingjournalism.com A conversation about multimedia storytelling with students at the University of Florida Thu, 16 Feb 2012 01:46:40 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.3 Comment on Amateur bowler and pro shop owner practices life-long hobby by alejandriaartiles http://www.rethinkingjournalism.com/2012/02/14/amateur-bowler-and-pro-shop-owner-practices-life-long-hobby/#comment-69 alejandriaartiles Thu, 16 Feb 2012 01:46:40 +0000 http://www.rethinkingjournalism.com/?p=165#comment-69 I love your video! I feel I got to know him and his passion for bowling. I really like the images of him working and making the balls. It is really nice that you got the footage of him as a kid as well. The only thing I will recommend is to put the words: Courtesy of Chad McLean on a smaller font because it gets a little bit distracting. I really like that you show me all the details of his awards, his rings and his office. Also, it is good that the storyline is well focus on him. Great closing line!! I love your video! I feel I got to know him and his passion for bowling. I really like the images of him working and making the balls. It is really nice that you got the footage of him as a kid as well. The only thing I will recommend is to put the words: Courtesy of Chad McLean on a smaller font because it gets a little bit distracting. I really like that you show me all the details of his awards, his rings and his office. Also, it is good that the storyline is well focus on him. Great closing line!!

]]> Comment on Belly dancer addresses cultural misconceptions by alejandriaartiles http://www.rethinkingjournalism.com/2012/02/14/belly-dancer-addresses-cultural-misconceptions/#comment-68 alejandriaartiles Thu, 16 Feb 2012 01:28:53 +0000 http://www.rethinkingjournalism.com/?p=174#comment-68 The photos and video of her dancing on the backyard on the grass are beautiful!! I really love all the images and the lighting when she is dancing at the restaurant as well. I love what you did in general with the b-roll, it is colorful, it has music and it has interaction, great job!! The only two things I will recommend is that although you did a great job showing what she does, I would like to know more about her. Also, I do not think you need to show the map of the Middle East, people should know where it is located. Again, great job!! I am sure your final piece is going to be amazing! The photos and video of her dancing on the backyard on the grass are beautiful!! I really love all the images and the lighting when she is dancing at the restaurant as well. I love what you did in general with the b-roll, it is colorful, it has music and it has interaction, great job!! The only two things I will recommend is that although you did a great job showing what she does, I would like to know more about her. Also, I do not think you need to show the map of the Middle East, people should know where it is located. Again, great job!! I am sure your final piece is going to be amazing!

]]> Comment on Local chocolate maker takes on Valentine’s Day craze by sixtinegurrey http://www.rethinkingjournalism.com/2012/02/14/local-chocolate-maker-takes-on-valentines-day-craze/#comment-64 sixtinegurrey Tue, 14 Feb 2012 22:19:35 +0000 http://www.rethinkingjournalism.com/?p=166#comment-64 Thank you for your suggestions Mita. I brainstormed a bit with Professor Zerba and I'm changing up the angle of my piece where I will definitely have her talk more about her future plans. Thank you for your suggestions Mita. I brainstormed a bit with Professor Zerba and I’m changing up the angle of my piece where I will definitely have her talk more about her future plans.

]]> Comment on Local chocolate maker takes on Valentine’s Day craze by sixtinegurrey http://www.rethinkingjournalism.com/2012/02/14/local-chocolate-maker-takes-on-valentines-day-craze/#comment-63 sixtinegurrey Tue, 14 Feb 2012 22:17:56 +0000 http://www.rethinkingjournalism.com/?p=166#comment-63 Thanks for your suggestions Jessica. Yea, I couldn't figure out what to put to cover the jump cuts at the end so I decided to leave it and brainstorm ideas. Thanks for your suggestions Jessica. Yea, I couldn’t figure out what to put to cover the jump cuts at the end so I decided to leave it and brainstorm ideas.

]]> Comment on Local chocolate maker takes on Valentine’s Day craze by sixtinegurrey http://www.rethinkingjournalism.com/2012/02/14/local-chocolate-maker-takes-on-valentines-day-craze/#comment-62 sixtinegurrey Tue, 14 Feb 2012 22:16:06 +0000 http://www.rethinkingjournalism.com/?p=166#comment-62 Thanks Aundre for your suggestions. I'm changing my angle for next week so I'll make sure to put in all your suggestions. Thanks Aundre for your suggestions. I’m changing my angle for next week so I’ll make sure to put in all your suggestions.

]]> Comment on Spinning the Web, new cd by Janna Pelle is about cutting ties. by sixtinegurrey http://www.rethinkingjournalism.com/2012/02/14/spinning-the-web-new-cd-by-janna-pelle-is-about-cutting-ties/#comment-60 sixtinegurrey Tue, 14 Feb 2012 22:03:38 +0000 http://www.rethinkingjournalism.com/?p=172#comment-60 Hey aundre, I can't imagine how frustrating it was for you to have worked so hard on it and yet, the video export didn't turn out. But hey, that's why we have a week to fix it up. It was hard to follow the story witht hte video glitches etc but one thing I would suggest is for you to be careful with the start of your clips soundwise. In some parts words were cut off at the beginning of the shot. Simplify your story. I feel like you got a little lost in it and in trying to tell everything. Maybe go back and make a storyline to figure out exactly what the angle is. Why are we watching this? Figure that out. Plan it out and start your story building from there. Hey aundre,

I can’t imagine how frustrating it was for you to have worked so hard on it and yet, the video export didn’t turn out. But hey, that’s why we have a week to fix it up. It was hard to follow the story witht hte video glitches etc but one thing I would suggest is for you to be careful with the start of your clips soundwise. In some parts words were cut off at the beginning of the shot. Simplify your story. I feel like you got a little lost in it and in trying to tell everything. Maybe go back and make a storyline to figure out exactly what the angle is. Why are we watching this? Figure that out. Plan it out and start your story building from there.

]]> Comment on Belly dancer addresses cultural misconceptions by sixtinegurrey http://www.rethinkingjournalism.com/2012/02/14/belly-dancer-addresses-cultural-misconceptions/#comment-59 sixtinegurrey Tue, 14 Feb 2012 21:38:59 +0000 http://www.rethinkingjournalism.com/?p=174#comment-59 The opening shot is fantastic. I want to see more of that. Could you possibly show more scenes of her dancing by herself outside the restaurant. One thing to watch out for is the audio levels. They need to be more balanced out where the person speaking over the video should be louder than the background noise. Also, let the piece breathe and use the dancing footage to do it! Your piece is so aesthetically beautiful, you should play that up. Great job :) The opening shot is fantastic. I want to see more of that. Could you possibly show more scenes of her dancing by herself outside the restaurant. One thing to watch out for is the audio levels. They need to be more balanced out where the person speaking over the video should be louder than the background noise. Also, let the piece breathe and use the dancing footage to do it! Your piece is so aesthetically beautiful, you should play that up.

Great job :)

]]> Comment on Local chocolate maker takes on Valentine’s Day craze by jessicaoliver http://www.rethinkingjournalism.com/2012/02/14/local-chocolate-maker-takes-on-valentines-day-craze/#comment-58 jessicaoliver Tue, 14 Feb 2012 18:21:28 +0000 http://www.rethinkingjournalism.com/?p=166#comment-58 I like how the video starts. It gives us a view of where she works and lets us process it before she starts talking. I also like how we are there for the whole process of chocolate making. I think you could let her talk between 0:22 and 0:32. The silence is a little long. I like the broll though. I would also like to see more close ups of the chocolate as it is being made. Maybe as she is pouring it. You did have a couple of jump cuts after the three minute mark. Hopefully you can cut it down to under three minutes. I was hoping you would have some picture of the chocolate, so I'm glad you got those in at the end. Overall, I really liked it. I love that we can see someone who just started a business and the pressures that go with that. Great job! I like how the video starts. It gives us a view of where she works and lets us process it before she starts talking. I also like how we are there for the whole process of chocolate making.

I think you could let her talk between 0:22 and 0:32. The silence is a little long. I like the broll though. I would also like to see more close ups of the chocolate as it is being made. Maybe as she is pouring it. You did have a couple of jump cuts after the three minute mark. Hopefully you can cut it down to under three minutes.

I was hoping you would have some picture of the chocolate, so I’m glad you got those in at the end. Overall, I really liked it. I love that we can see someone who just started a business and the pressures that go with that. Great job!

]]> Comment on Belly dancer addresses cultural misconceptions by jessicaoliver http://www.rethinkingjournalism.com/2012/02/14/belly-dancer-addresses-cultural-misconceptions/#comment-57 jessicaoliver Tue, 14 Feb 2012 18:09:46 +0000 http://www.rethinkingjournalism.com/?p=174#comment-57 I also think you did a wonderful job. I love the pictures you took. They are beautiful. I love the opening photo. I like how you show each of the body parts as she talks about them. The close ups on her body are very nice. I like the different point of view. This is a compelling story as well. Like Andrea mentioned, there are a few glitches. She does get cut off when she is speaking. It does also black out a few times. However, those are easy fixes. Great job!! I also think you did a wonderful job. I love the pictures you took. They are beautiful. I love the opening photo. I like how you show each of the body parts as she talks about them. The close ups on her body are very nice. I like the different point of view. This is a compelling story as well.

Like Andrea mentioned, there are a few glitches. She does get cut off when she is speaking. It does also black out a few times. However, those are easy fixes.

Great job!!

]]> Comment on An typecasted actor determined to get the role by jessicaoliver http://www.rethinkingjournalism.com/2012/02/14/an-typecasted-actor-determined-to-get-the-role/#comment-56 jessicaoliver Tue, 14 Feb 2012 18:01:34 +0000 http://www.rethinkingjournalism.com/?p=161#comment-56 Thank you both very much for your feedback. I agree completely with both of you. I have footage of him talking about roles he has played and of what he wants to do in the future, but I couldn't fit it in. I will try to this week. I will also get better broll. I know the computer thing is confusing. I was trying to show him as a student. I will also get some of him as a child and maybe on stage. Thank you again for your input. Thank you both very much for your feedback. I agree completely with both of you. I have footage of him talking about roles he has played and of what he wants to do in the future, but I couldn’t fit it in. I will try to this week. I will also get better broll. I know the computer thing is confusing. I was trying to show him as a student. I will also get some of him as a child and maybe on stage. Thank you again for your input.

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